Sunday, August 15, 2010

Pavan's Fan Fiction : Swat Kats - End of Dr. Viper?





SWAT KATS : The Radical Squadron

Viper’s Doom
           




            The sky is tinged with a deep purple haze, a cloud of dust and smog hangs over the skyline of Megakat city, the crowded streets below, bustling with Kats. The wind is calm and the stars have begun to gleam with the setting of the evening sun.  Something stirs in the biochemical department of Megakat Laboratories, a pair of bright yellow eyes glancing through the shelves apparently searching for a chemical. “Yesss…” hissing laughter escapes the green elongated jaws of Dr.Viper, the most sinister criminal the city has seen. He has found what he was searching for. Slowly he slithers back into the sewers of the lively metropolis.
“sssoon Megakat sssity will be at my feet begging for the antidote. This will teach thossse insssolent foolss not to mock my resssearch hahahahaha..” with that the short half lizard half Kat pours the toxin into the sewer water instantly mutating all the creatures that inhabit the channels of Megakat’s waste disposal system.
            Meanwhile, at the Megakat salvage yard, a TV emits loud shrieking noises followed by loud laughter inside what seems to be a garage. T-Bone, a plump ace fighter pilot, clutching his bottle of milk is roaring with laughter and hitting his partner Razor who’s seated next to him laughing uncontrollably. “hahahahahaha Tom is so funny! He can never catch that little mouse ahahahaha..” T-Bone exclaims loudly. Razor nods with agreement and sets his own bottle down still shaking with fits of laughter. Suddenly a blaring siren begins to ring throughout the garage and the duo chokes on their milk and sputter all over each other.

“Yes Ms. Briggs” says an alarmed T-bone after hitting the red light on the intercom.
“Swat Kats! Dr. Viper has poisoned the sewers of Megakat City and now his evil mutants are running amok in the city!”
“We’re on our way!” shouts Razor already unzipping his overalls to reveal a sleek black and red jumpsuit, T-Bone doing the same while running towards the Turbokat, a jet they had built from scratch using scraps from their salvage yard. Moments later, the black jet takes off into the air from an underground ramp leaving behind a trail of smoke.
“Wonder what that slimy reptile is up to this time” Razor inquired
“No idea but I’m sure we’re about to find out and it isn’t going to be something we can’t handle buddy” T-Bone replies as the duo soar high above the city.
“ Calling all enforcers…” said a voice amidst static sounds through the radio “..this is lieutenant Feral, the source of Viper’s mutants seem to be appearing from the sewers around Megakat Labs.. “
“Ya hear that buddy?”

“Yeah we’re already here… Holy Kats look at the size of that rat, Razor!” shouts T-Bone.
“Yeah I see him buddy, Incinerator Missiles locked on target! Firing in 3..2..1..” A few seconds later, “Booyah! Direct hit!” Razor shouts back as the 30 foot rat bursts into flame and instantly turns to ash.

“Hey T-Bone, air drop me over the sewer outside Megakat Labs. I’ll take care of Viper you try and figure out a way to stop his mutants!”
 “Razor, the sewers contain water so if we freeze that water, we might have a shot at stopping the mutants in their tracks”
“It might just do the trick. Why don’t you pick up a tank of rocket coolant from MASA I’m sure the Megakat Aeronautics Space Association would like to help in putting a stop to this mayhem” suggests Razor before jumping out of his seat and gliding to the ground using his portable parachute. “Pick me up in fifteen minutes I’ll find a way to stop Viper!” he radios in while pulling open a sewer cover.  
            “If I was a demented doctor trying to take over the city, where would I be..?” Razor thinks to himself as he wades through the underground channels filled with the city’s waste. After pinning two giant cockroaches to the wall with a few well aimed shots of his cement gun, he moves swiftly towards a secluded area following the sound of shifting feet. “Viper!” he yells at the sight of those glowing yellow eyes. “This will be the end of you ssswat Kat!” hisses Dr. Viper and pounces. His strength almost overpowers the comparatively puny yet agile Razor. After wrestling each other and swapping blows, Razor hears a familiar voice in his helmet

“Come in Razor.. I’ve got the payload and blown all the creatures above ground to kingdom come. I’m nearing the drop site you need to get out of the sewers NOW!”

Holding his arm stretched straight ahead, a gun with two barrels appears out of his glove. With the scope to his eye, Razor takes aim and fires one shot. Ropes shoot out of his glove, binding the menacing doctor. “Got’cha!”
“I’ve bound the doctor. I’ll just leave him for the enforcers. We don’t wanna make it look like the enforcers are completely useless” chuckles Razor while making his way out of the sewer, along with a bound Dr. Viper on his back. After dropping the evil genius on the ground Razor is airlifted into his seat in the Turbokat behind his partner.

“HAHAHA You got that right bud. Deploying coolant now!” With that, T-Bone drops the payload into the sewers, which in turn freezes all the mutants as a wave of ice sweeps through.

“I think its safe to say that Viper has finally been wiped out!” at this, the duo burst out laughing as they fly over Megakat City, homeward bound after a long day’s work.

Monday, August 9, 2010

Pavan's Fan Fiction reviews

Entourage is an American drama/comedy which documents the ascent of Vincent Chase, an A-List movie star and his childhood friends from Queens Boulevard as they make their way through the rugged and unfamiliar terrain of Hollywood. What fascinates me about the show besides the Hollywood high-life setting is the constantly recurring theme of male camaraderie. However, the fan-fiction entitled ‘New Shawty on the Block’ introduces a new character Peyton, a budding actress who gets the opportunity to be Vince’s co-star in a big budget film. I feel that introducing a new character adds an element of surprise to the show but Peyton snatches the limelight from the rest of the characters as there is not a slightest mention of the other three characters namely Eric Murphy, Turtle and Johnny Drama. This takes away the essence of the story as it conflicts with a major theme. Although the fiction has been written with vivid detail, the episode’s focus shifts from the action-packed life of Vincent Chase and his entourage to a monotonous conversation between the former and Peyton on the set of their new film. Overall, I feel this is a grave mistake on behalf of the author as he has altered the essence of the show





How I Met Your Mother is an American situation based comedy wherein the main character, Ted Mosby recounts to his son and daughter the events that led to him meeting their mother. This explains the title and allows for narration in the past tense. The creators, Carter Bays and Craig Thomas were inspired by the idea of writing about his friends and the stupid things they did together in New York. The character Ted is based on Bays and that of Marshall and Lily is loosely based on Thomas and his wife. In this fan fiction, Ted tricks his friend Barney who is a compulsive womanizer and sex addict into taking a trip from New York to Colorado in search of Annie’s Boobs which is actually a monkey from a fictional television show called The Community. This is not particularly a masterpiece but definitely has the essence of the original show along which could be attributed to a vivid description of the characters’ antics. Although the plot of this episode may seem corny, the writer has played his cards right by keeping the essence of the original characters and their reactions to the corresponding situation intact. For example, Robin who is not the brightest of the lot in the tv show takes a while in this fan fiction to understand Ted’s joke about Annie’s Boobs. Overall, I feel that the writer has done a good job but there is definitely scope for improvement.



SWAT Kats: The Radical Squadron is an animated television series produced by Hanna Barbera Productions and aired between the years 1993 and 1995. Chance “T-Bone” Furlong and Jake “Razor” Clawson were paramilitary law enforcement officers turned vigilante justice heroes who lived in a salvage yard they had been exiled to for disobeying their commander’s orders. Rebellious yet righteous by nature, the duo fought crime and protected the innocent in the metropolis of Megakat City, which was populated entirely by felines, known as Kats. This fan fiction is about the death of ‘Razor’ after being infected by Dr. Viper’s biochemical substances. It is an interesting take albeit a sad one, on the grim death of a near superhero status of one of the greatest fictional co-pilots to have ever lived. I was deeply saddened by this fan fiction as SWAT Kats was my favourite television show as a child and Razor was my beloved of the two.







That 70’s Show is an American sitcom that revolves around the lives of a group of teenage friends and two neighbouring families living in the suburb of Point Place Wisconsin from May 17th 1976 to December 31st 1979. This fan fiction consists of Eric missing his plane to Africa, where he was meant to become a teacher and earn enough money so he could go to college along with his high school sweetheart, Donna. It is an alternate ending to season 7 wherein Eric actually goes to Africa. Eric’s annoying, self-centered friend Jackie is going away to Chicago and wants to see her friend off so she turns up at the airport only to realize the former has missed his flight and had his trip cancelled. Eventually she convinces him to go to Chicago with her as her assistant/cameraman. Although this is against his best judgment it seems to be a better idea than going home. This is an interesting plot twist and has scope in reality as it sticks to the characteristics of the characters. Jackie is manipulative and Eric is easily influenced in the show as well. So in my opinion this fan fiction works very well and turned out to be a more interesting read than I had expected.



Zombieland (2009) is an American comedy film in which the main characters are the sole survivors of a zombie post-apocalypse. Their search for a sanctuary free of zombies has been set as the plot for the film. Set in post apocalyptic America, two months after mad cow disease mutated into mad person disease which in turn mutated into mad zombie disease.  This fan fiction entitled Zombieland :  Survival, picks up from where the film left off. It is a narrative from Columbus’s perspective. The former is a timid, geeky college boy who stumbled across one of the first zombies in his dorm room. The other characters are Tallahassee – the “badass” lumberjack wearing snakeskin boots who was the ultimate zombie killer, Wichita—a really beautiful girl, and Little Rock — the latter’s sister. The four of them are supposedly on their way to Canada because Tallahassee figured that Twinkies last longer in the cold and zombies probably mutate slower there because of the cold. This fan fiction plot works well and was possibly my favourite as it is a conversation between the protagonists and has been written well explicitly stating the thoughts of the narrator along with speech. The transitions from thought to speech really brought the story to life and almost seemed as if it were the original screenplay for Zombieland : The Sequel.






South Park is an animated American sitcom, the plot of which revolves around four children namely, Stan Marsh, Kyle Broflovski, Kenny McCormick and Eric Cartman and their bizarre adventures around the fictitious Colorado town (South Park). Due to its crude, sardonic, dark and topical humour, frequent depiction of taboo matter, disregard of decency standards, portrayal of religion for comical benefits, general toilet humour and coarse language South Park is intended for mature audiences and is generating controversy over the course of its run. This fan fiction entitled ‘For Daws to Peck at’ depicts the boys as teenagers meeting up at a Cartman’s place to drink beer and play Xbox. This appears to be the author’s take on South Park wherein the characters have grown into their teens and start learning that life isn’t always easy. It appears as if he may have written it out of his own experiences. This is the first chapter so it is almost as if the author is providing some background information on the children’s life as teenagers. Apart from the usual crass language, there is no sense of conflict, or drama or that notorious humour that South Park is infamous for. I believe this chapter has a lot more scope, but from the way it is at the moment, I feel that it is boring, and quite a waste of time as not much was established in the plot except for the boys hanging out, drinking beer, talking about Wendy Testaburger and why she spends so much time with Kenny.




Californication is an American drama/comedy television show which revolves around the protagonist Hank Moody (David Duchovny) a troubled novelist who moves to California which coupled with his writer’s block complicates his relationship with his long time girlfriend Karen and daughter Becca. This show appeals to me and has me anxiously awaiting a new episode each week because I see a little bit of myself in Hank. It is inspirational to see how he goes on writing in spite of all the tribulations life seems to throw his way. This fan fiction entitled ‘Tangled up in Blue and Other Misdemeanours’ is one of the best pieces of work I have come across so far. It is clear that the author watches the show religiously as he has retained the original feel of the script, the mannerisms of the characters and they way they act with each other. Although the fan fiction is short, it makes perfect sense and would make a great episode if incorporated into the show’s script.



Weeds is an American drama television series which revolves around Nancy Botwin a newly-widowed mother of two who turns to selling Marijuana to sustain her family after the sudden death of her husband. The title is a slang term for marijuana which is familiar to Americans. The first three seasons involve Nancy distributing locally but seasons four to six show her smuggling contraband from Mexico into the United States. This fan fiction entitled ‘The Tower’ is about a DEA Agent, William Morgan, who stumbles across a startling piece of evidence against Silas, the eldest of the Botwins, enough to put him behind bars for at least fifty years. After being kidnapped by Silas, William is brought to the Botwin residence where he is threatened first, and then is convinced by the Botwins that they are doing more good than bad by selling pot and that if he cooperates by destroying the evidence, he will be allowed to go scot-free. As I had anticipated, he cooperates and returns home to his family. A few years after William’s death by car-accident, his wife receives money on a weekly basis from an anonymous person who obviously is Nancy Botwin. I feel this fan fiction works very well and would make an interesting plot for the upcoming season.








God of War is an action adventure RPG (Role Playing Game) for the Playstation 2 and 3. It is based on Greek Mythology and focused mainly on Kratos a warrior who serves the Greek Gods of Olympus. After seeing his impending doom at the hands of a barbarian king, Kratos cuts a deal with Ares the Greek God of War to slay his enemies in return for the former’s soul. After being tricked by Ares, Kratos kills his wife and child unknowingly. Enraged by this treachery, Kratos makes it his personal mission to kill Ares and in eventually doing so becomes the God of War.  In this fan fiction, Kratos has been damned to the year 2010 and is dazed and confused because he is unfamiliar to this environment. Quite humourous and at the same time action-packed with flying ketchup and mustard this fan fiction makes an interesting read. Although it is not a viable candidate for a film, it would be great as a short web based episode or a parody on the game.








Grand Theft Auto (GTA) is an action adventure role playing video game that allows the player to take up the role of a criminal who roams the streets freely completing missions such as bank robberies, assassinations, kidnapping, bombing and most importantly, grand theft auto. This fan fiction entitled ‘Lucky’ revolves around an undercover cop named Lance who works for LCPD (Liberty City Police Department) which is loosely based on one of the GTA series titled ‘Liberty City Stories’ Lance strives to keep his cover and at the same time roam the streets of Liberty City in search of the famous mafia don, Salvatore Leone who had recently resurfaced after a decade long sabbatical. I feel that the writer has brought the character to life with his immaculate descriptions of his (Lance) history and the surrounding areas. This story definitely has scope and I would love to see it becoming a part of the plot for one of the games in the near future.

Tuesday, August 3, 2010

Mon's Fanfic

"Shake my heart" - The story of Reiko Natsume from "Natsume's Book Of Friends"


Why am I here?  What is my purpose?  Why me?
I do not want to see these things that no one else can't.
All I want is to be "normal".
This is not a "gift", it's a curse.

"You can see me right?" a voice suddenly popped up.
I turned my head and see a face upside down looking at me with fierce curious eyes.
"What do you want?" I asked cautiously.  The white pale face slowly slide down from above and turned her/his, I am not so certain "it" is a male or a female, head straight and then spoke once again, "I can smell your strong scent from far away, you smell...... DELICIOUS!" The thing suddenly attacked me straight on and grabbed hold of my neck while it's mouth growing larger and larger just about to swallow my head.  I felt my eyes start to burn, and then I remember what my grandfather had taught me when I was only three.  I quickly bite my finger to draw blood so I can write an ancient spell on my right palm.  Once the spell is written I closed both of my palms together and start to mumble the ancient spell in words.  The thing dropped me instantly and immediately pulled itself away.  I then grab a piece of paper and ink pen on my desk to start positioning the "zone" to trap the monster.  The monster realized that it is not possible to escape so it then tried to attack me again but failed because the monster is no longer able to move since it is within my control.
Now that the monster is defeated it begged, "Please don't kill me, I am only too hungry.  Every other monster are all stronger than me, they have taken all my food."

"It is not my problem.  You tried to eat me too!  Give me a better reason not to demolish you."  I said as I put my hands together and ready to start another spell to finish the monster off.

"All right, all right!"  The monster panicked and says, "How about I give you my name?"

"Why do I need your name for!?"

"A monster's name is very important, it's just as important as my life!"

"Then I might as well take your life."

"No, no, you don't understand.  Once you have my name, I will become your friend, your ally."

The monster's words start to make sense to me.  I have neither friends nor allies, never thought I will ever have any or needed any.  Humans are scared of me because I talk about things that they do not understand. All the monsters want is to eat me.  But this monster is different, there were no monsters offered their name.  No monsters so far I met begged for their life.  So I start to wonder...
"Why are you offering your name to become my ally?"

"If I offer you my name, I may have a chance to live longer."

"What makes you think I'll let you live after you've given me your name?"

"We will have a contract.  Once my name is given, you cannot destroy it.  If you do, it will be your life that gets shortened.  A human life is very short.  You wouldn't want to jeopardize your own life would you?"

"You know, I don't need a monster for a friend or an ally."

"PLEASE! Please don't kill me, I don't want to disappear!"

"Why do you want to live so badly??"

"There is someone I cannot leave behind."

"Someone?  Another monster?"

"No, a human, a human who I owe a great favour to long long time ago.  She is getting too old and she may leave this world soon.  But not yet, I cannot leave before she does.  You can take my life after she's gone."

It never occurred to me that monsters can have feelings or remember any "favours" received, especially from human.  Now I am curious, who is this human and what did she do for this monster?  So I asked, "Tell me your story with her.  I want to know what kind of "favour" you owe her that is just as important as your life, your name."
As I listen to his story, I felt my heart start to shake.  The story was about a weak monster that lay in the forest alone after a fight it will never win.   The monster lay in the forest for days, it was hungry but with no strength to hunt.  The monster cried, hoping for pity, but days and days gone by there were no hope.  Until a girl passing by who also has a gift similar to mine but with no power to place spells.  The girl was young and naive she approached the monster and gave it food later with shelter to heal the monster's wounds.  The girl had left the monster without saying goodbye.  Since then, the monster had been searching for this girl and guardian her after it found her recently.
A monster with an infatuated mind is rare.  In fact, I used to believe they don't exist.  It was interesting enough, so I decided from now on whichever monster challenges me will be betting on their name, their story.
From now onwards, I will set my journey on creating my "book of friends" using my so-called "gift".

Once decision is made I say to the monster, "I will accept your contract.  Give me your name." 




(THE END)










Kevin's Fan Fiction

With pumpkin carriage and beautiful dress, that how Cinderella entered the Palace. Everybody glimpsed at her. Her pumpkin carriage was so elegant and her dress was the most beautiful thing that anyone has ever seen. Any men who saw couldn’t get their eyes off her. Even the ladies, with jealousy, stared at her. She was the most beautiful lady at the ball. As she walked into the hall, people have to move to make a way for her. Even her stepmother and her 2 step sisters couldn’t take their eyes off her. They didn’t know who the lady in the beautiful dress was but she was just too beautiful to be true.


Finally, time for all the ladies have been waiting for has come. As it was the party for Prince to find his one and only, the future queen, he had to dance with every lady at the ball. There were many beautiful ladies at the ball but only one that prince was waiting for was Cinderella.

Shortly after, it was Cinderella’s turn to dance, both prince and Cinderella’s heart was beating fast. Prince was waiting to dance with Cinderella. As they hold their hands and began to dance, everybody was looking at the couple. Even the King and the Queen thought Cinderella was right match for Prince.
As they dance, the time was passing and the clock hand was moving toward the “12”. Cinderella was getting anxious. The whole spell will disappear at 12, just like it was just a dream. The clock was finally showing 12 o’clock and the bell was ringing. Cinderella quickly turned herself away from the prince and ran away, leaving only a glass slipper.

After the party, the normal life of Cinderella had begun once again. Everything was back to normal, pumpkin, mouse, dress and everything. Her stepmother and stepsisters made her prepare meal, do dishes, do the laundry and all the house work that anyone can think of and more. For a while, everyone in the house was talking about the “BEAUTIFUL” lady at the ball which made Cinderella smile every time she hears the story.

Prince, himself couldn’t forget Cinderella as well. By holding on to her glass slipper, he decided to find her true love. With just few servants the prince goes around houses of every people that attended the party. When he arrived at Cinderella’s house, her heart was beating fast again. The glass slipper was only made for her and no one else can fit the shoes. Just like many other ladies, her sisters have tried the glass slipper but failed except one, who nearly got her foot on. As the prince was about to go, Cinderella stopped him. He called him back and asked him to let her try. Prince did not like to but everyone can try it on. But when Cinderella put on the shoes, it was perfect fit for her. The prince was confused. She was nothing like the “most beautiful girl that anyone would have ever met.” No one can find that beautiful lady in Cinderella. Stepmother and stepsisters were laughing at her. They thought she just happen to have same size foot as that beautiful lady. There was just no way Cinderella could be the beautiful lady at the ball. She had silky skin that is soft like babies, big eyes; Cinderella had nothing in common with the beautiful lady. Pimples all over her face, big nose, and even small eyes. Everything was different from the lady from the ball. All thanks to the fairy god mother, not only she got the pumpkin carriage and beautiful dress but also “plastic surgery” that made her so pretty that no one could notice it was Cinderella that they know.

The prince got confused. He was going to marry the lady from the ball but it was too different from what he thought it would be. He just thought he would find that beautiful lady, marry her and live happily ever after just like other fairy tale. But as Cinderella got back to as she was, back to the ugly “Cinderella”, the prince didn’t know what to do. He just wanted to run away but the girl that he dreamed about is right in front of him, in a little bit different form I should say. He actually didn’t know what to do, whether to stay or go, to marry her or leave her.

He looked around to find somewhere to hide. Then he found someone. Someone that wasn’t as ugly as Cinderella, to be honest, much more beautiful than Ugly Cinderella. Drizella, that was her name. She was Cinderella’s step sister and her foot was small enough to fit the Glass slipper, almost. She could not be as beautiful as the lady at the ball, but the prince had to find some way not to marry Cinderella. “The lady at the ball was Drizella.” The prince shouted out. He felt sorry for Cinderella but he just couldn’t marry her.

After the incident at Cinderella’s house, the prince brought Drizella back to castle. They made a huge wedding and got married. And they lived happily ever after. Sadly for Cinderella, she was left behind with her stepmother and another stepsister and lived whole life doing house work, wishing the Fairy God mother would come back to save her, make her pretty again,



THE END

Xtina's fanfic - Peter Pan

It was a silent autumn night. The trees were tip-toeing with the breeze and dimly glowing street lamps were lighting the empty street. Wendy lay flat in her bed staring into the emptiness. She could hear a dog crying in the distance. She’d been trying to go back to sleep since she woke up a while ago but something was bothering her from inside that made her heart beat fast. Wendy finally stood her thin body up and out of the bed.

The hallway was dark and somewhat spooky. When Wendy turned the wooden door knob to her brothers' room she found Michael and John sound asleep in their beds. Michael was holding onto his teddy bear as if it was going to leave him and John had laid his gentleman's hat next to his pillow carefully along with his glasses. They looked so peaceful lying there. Wendy slowly walked to Michael and reached her hands out to tuck him in better when there was a loud bang just outside the window. She screamed and quickly covered her mouth looking at her brothers. Silence. Wendy broke herself free and walked towards the window. Slowly, she reached out her pale white hand and opened the curtain and gasped in surprise. There he was. Peter Pan. Her oldest and dearest friend. The long lost friend. The reason of her many sleepless nights.

"Peter," Wendy whispered trying to hide the joy but she didn't do a very good job.

Peter invited himself into the house, as he always did, followed by Tinkerbell.

Tinkerbell gave Wendy a snappy look as she stayed near the window. Wendy always thought Tinkerbell didn't really fancy her but, she never confronted and Tinkerbell never admitted.

"Peter, what in world? How did you? Why are you?"

"Gee, Wendy, you have to learn to speak first!"

Peter started laughing and his laughter was echoing around the small room.

"Shhh, Peter, keep your voice down! You might wake them up!" said Wendy glancing at the beds.

"But why? Sleeping isn't fun! Being wide awake, flying and playing is the best!"

"Stop it. You don't understand how hard it was for us! The magic, pirates, Captain Hook, orphans and the battle on the ship! We were back here but we weren't really back. The boys struggled. We kept telling each other that we’ll go back to Neverland. That you would come back for us. That Tinkerbell would do her little magic and we would think our happy things and boom, we would fly again! We waited and waited but you never came. You never did!""

"Come on, Wendy. It's unfair. You can't blame it on me!"

"You haven't changed. Nothing matters to you. You don't care about anything but yourself!"

"Enough, both of you! Wendy, here, take this. I know this will make you feel better," Tinkerbell said and tossed a brown bag into Wendy's hands. Wendy knew what it was.

"Come on, just like the old days! Time to fly high again."

Wendy slowly turned and looked at the two boys. She wasn't sure whether she should wake them up. They would be thrilled to fly again but then...

"Don't worry about John and Michael. We can come back for them later!" Peter said as he was opening the bag in Wendy's hand and pushing it towards her.  Wendy could see the soft white powder sparkling and glaring at her, and she knew that she was ready for what she had missed for so long.
 




 


“I've never seen anything like this,” Lieutenant Hook thought as he scanned through the dull room.  He'd been with the force all his life and he was certain he had seen the worst. Not until today. Two boys, identified as John and Michael, were found in their beds. Forensics say that they were hung by someone and then laid in bed. They both looked so peaceful except for the bruise around their necks. They must have not known what was happening to them. Hook had a feeling that their blood test would come back positive for sedatives.

“Lucky for them, I should say,” Hook muttered and sighed.

The DNA of the skin tissue found on the rope used to hang them matched that of their parents. Hook slowly walked over to the man and the woman lying on the floor next to the window. The neighbours say that they were a happy couple but something was different since a few months ago when Peter's business went down the road. Peter started drinking and Wendy, the wife, seemed to be anxious all the time. Lieutenant Hook looked down at Peter again. Dressed in a dark green T-shirt, Peter’s dead face looked a little crooked.

“Is he smiling? Happy-death? How ironic.”

Peter's olive skinned hand was holding on to Wendy's pale hand. Hook stared into Wendy's blank blue eyes.

“Pretty. Very,” Hook thought.

Her fair blonde hair was draped around her face. Her white silk sleeping dress was wrapped around her body showing off her curves. A blue ribbon that must have fallen off her hair when she collapsed, was sitting right next to her waist. Hook felt sorry for this once-alive young woman. A journal had been found in Wendy's bedside table earlier. It seems like Wendy was creating this new world called 'Neverland' and started referring to her sons as her brothers.  Also, she had this delusion that her family could fly with this magic powder. That explained (or   So that was) why the boys were hung before being laid in their beds. He was again relieved that the boys were heavily sedated before all this happened.

Lieutenant Hook was deep in his thoughts when an officer approached him and handed over a yellow folder. The blood tests of the parents had just come back and they were positive for both alcohol and drugs. The report said, “The cause of death: overdose”. Just as he predicted. Hook felt the cool autumn breeze on his cheek and looked outside. The window was wide open with the curtain dancing in the wind. Hook stared at the little fairy figure in green hanging at the window. Cool air blew into the room again and made the fairy fly by the window.  Lieutenant Hook could be wrong, but for a second, he thought the fairy lips twisted as their eyes met.

YOU SUN'S FAN FICTION - Twilight

Hello, This is my fan fiction. It is based around the movie , Twilight.
I changed the stroy. I hope you enjoy reading my fan fiction.


The weather was bonechilling cold and the whole town was shrouded by a thick veil of mist.

Edward left Bella without a single word of farewell.
Bella sat on a dark green arm chair and just kept staring at the beautiful ring which Edward gave to her, with a blank look on her face as though her mind were somewhere else.
She waited in the forlorn hope that Edward would one day comes back to her.
The day, he comes back to her with a bright smile and putting his arms around her shoulder and hugging warmly.

Bella felt an overwhelming desire to get love from Edward but it was so hard to wait him without any news.
However, before she knew it, her heart and passion for him was cooling down slowly. She got tired of waiting for him.
Now she couldn't hold her tears and passed her days in tears in her dark room. It was a difficult and lonely time for her.
Every time Bella felt loneliness, she closed her eyes and thought the moment, Edward and Bella shared their love together on the flower bed inside of the deep deep forest to tried to overcome the sad feeling.
Even if she fought the bad feeling herself hardly, she felt so empty.

Suddenlly, Bella wanted to make a phone call to Jacob in her head and wished hear his calm, gentle voice. Bella picked up the old classic telephone, right beside of her bad and punched out Jacob's number. 
"R-r-ring, R-r-ring, R-r-ring." but there was no answer.
"Should I make a call again or just leave a message." Bella dithered over the decision. Finallly, she left a message,
" Hi, Jacob. It's me. Bella. I just want to talk with you about Edward.  I'll go to Edward house to find him but as you know, his house is in the depths of the forest and  I don't know why, but I have an uneasy feeling about it. So, I'm trying to ask you to go there with me. Please don't feel bad about it and call me back as soon as possible if you hear this voice message. I'll waiting for you" 
She sat on the bad and anticipated his call for a while but to her dismay he didn't call.
"I left a message but he didn’t return my call. May be, he doesn't think we are a close friend anymore." Bella was forlornly sitting on the stairs and felt unhappy to realize this realistic situation. She inclined her steps to the deep forest to head for Edward's house alone.

It wasn't easy to find the way to go his house. She tryed to find her way but wandered through the woods and knew that she lost herself in there.
Even as she felt some strange feelings, a creepy sound came from somewhere.
She was afraid she might have lost her way.
At the moment she had been wandering through shadows, she impacted her neck by something unexpectedly  and her view suddenly became blurred and she lost her consciousness in the dark, creepy forest.

It was comfortable and familiar feeling when I awoke up and opened her eyes, she was lying her bad.
"What's happening to me, I was wandered through the woods and oh my god, I can't remember what happened there."
Someboy knocked on the door and came in the room carefully.
"Oh, dad. I don't understand how did I come home? Did I walked in myself?"
Bella asked to dad.
"No my darling. Someone brought you home." Dad said with worried face. 
Bella noticed the look of apprehension on his face.
"something was really wrong. Dad please tell me what happend honestly."
He hesitated to answer but not much later, he told the whole truth to Bella.

Bella ran in a heartbeat to Jacob after hearing that he got hurt protecting her from a mystery monster during her consciousness in the forest from her father.

When she reached him, his face was all wet with his sweat streaming down his face.  He was surely in pain but being a man, he was trying his best to hide it.  However, he wasn't doing a very good job.  Bella couldn’t bear to see him like that. She could feel something hot flowing up inside her.

"This is all my fault. Jacob took thought for me because he heard my messasge and followed me" Bella closed her eyes. She didn't want Jacob to see the pain and guilt in her eyes.

Finally, after quite a while, Jacob noticed Bella standing in the corner of the room. He slowly lifted his hand up as if she was within the reaching distance. Bella carefully moved towards him making sure all her tears are wipe off. 


“Bella, I need you and you need me. We both know that. I know you are too scared to admit it but deep inside you know that we are meaned to be together. Why are you keep trying to deny that?”
Jacob asked Bella calmly but sadly.
She couldn’t say anything but just looked at his sad face.


When she left his house, her mind was blank.  When she finally woke to herself, she found herself standing on the street of her house. 
Jacob talked about many things, his past, his destiny and his true feelings towards her but she only had one sentence echoeing in her head.
“I would never shatter you into pieces only for my own happiness and selfishness,” Jacob had said in a truthful voice in half consciousness.


It was the first time she heard Jacob’s honest feelings out loud.


She couldn’t sleep because she had too many things to think about. Not only Jacob but also Edward.
Her feelings for Jacob are complicated and subtle.  Everytime she thought of him, there was an array of mixed emotions floating in her mind.


Bella got out of bed and looked out the window thoughtlessly.
Suddenly, something caught her eyes. The full moon.
‘Why does the full moon look so sad.  How unusual…’ Bella whispered to herself and sighed deeply but Jacob's real love made her to give her heart to him slowly but strongly. It was a small sign of a new love.

(The End)

Thursday, July 29, 2010

Mon's TEN fanfic sites

1. Hakuouki is one of the anime that accidentally turned me into one of it's fans after 12 episodes.  Before I decided to watch, I had in mind it'll be like some ninja or mythical story but as it turns out: there is myth but no ninja, instead, all samurai.  It's a story based on an actual group "Shinsengumi" and events happened during late "Tokugawa Bakufu" period in Japan, but of course, most characters are probably fiction based except some names such as the group leader and main character Hijikata Toshizō.  Shinsengumi was a special police force formed for the mission to act as the protectors of Tokugawa Iemochi, the 14th shogun, who was preparing to embark on a trip to Kyoto.  However, this group later became a resistance towards the new government.  It was quite confusing in the beginning when I have no idea about that part of history and hard to stimulate my mind to keep watching.  So it bored me on the first two episodes until the story tension appeared.  My main motivation was the "picture perfect" images.  From characters to scenery, I cannot stop myself noticing the talented drawing skills.  However, the storyline got better and better towards the end although it was also getting more ridiculous at the same time also.  I think there's a possibility it's becoming more of a vampire love story than Samurai story.  Anyhow, I am still looking forward  to season two where the revolution has made and Shinsengumi continued to resist the new govt hoping to revive the old Edo period.  In this fanfic "Crossing Swords" although it's in one chapter (a very short one) quite a creative writing, I like the action in it.  Interesting and able to imagine the sword fight.  Longer would be good.

2. How can anyone not be a fan of HEROES? Imagine yourself with a special power and what would you do with it? Be like Peter, trying to save the world and turns out making it worse? Or like Syler, doing what is best for him only?  I wish I have the power of time travelling, like Hiro.  So I can go back time and see whether if history happened the same as it was written.  There are so many "what ifs..." in Heroes.  Nothing can ever be certain, although this drama is getting way too long for me to follow.  Still think the first three seasons were probably the best so far.  In this fanfic site, I really think it's quite well written, almost like the real thing.

3. Grey's Anatomy is following a group of interns' work and private life in and out of hospital.  It wasn't one of my favourite topic in TV drama that I'd choose to watch, however, that was what I thought before Dr. McDreamy came along.  It's always a bonus to find romance, comedy, and bit of adrenaline rush when "amazing things could happen" in hospital.  Some are funny, some can just be too surreal.  Sometimes I get bored watching Meredith so it's really great to see someone like Christina Yang to spice things up.  However, Derek seems to be still the centre of the attention in this fanfic site.  Quite a touching one based on the subject "if tomorrow never comes.", an insight of Derek's thoughts.  Very moving and almost draw my tears.  Wish there's a continued story for me to carry on reading, perhaps even better, making this into one of the episodes of "Grey's Anatomy".  Would be quite a big surprise to see Meredith pregnant.

4. Sex and the City is the best girl show I've ever seen.  Four strangers met in New York city and later became each others best friends for life.  It's wonderful to have friendship like Carrie, Samantha, Charlotte, and Miranda to have anything you can talk about with.  In this fanfic it's about the coming back of Samantha's breast cancer and she dies from it and written in Carrie's point of view after Samantha dies.  Although it's well written but somehow I think there's a little bit lack of word emotion expressed in the writing.  Perhaps not enough to feel touching yet, though it's very very VERY sad to see Samantha gone.  "Sex and the City" will never be "Sex and the City" anymore without either any one of the four.  But most of the times I think Samantha is the rep for "SEX" and Carrie is the "City" for the show's title.

5. Hotaru no Hikari  This is a drama which I think most of the girls now days can possibly reflect themselves with.  It feels great after a hard days work and comes home, change into something comfortable to wear with and go to the fridge and open up a cold can of BEER!  This type of woman in Japan is called "Himono Ona", a dried up woman aka a woman that no man will be attracted to.  The main character is focused on this Office Lady (OL) name Amemia Hotaru.  She's beautiful and hard working in the office who is also single (for a very long time already).  Her daily life would be: go to work and come home fully relaxed and be herself.  Until one day her boss from work got divorced and decided to come back to his father's home which was also rented to Hotaru.  They bump into each other at home without knowing they both living there at the same time until next day in the morning Hotaru's boss, Seiichi Takano, saw the mess in the house and found her sleeping on the floor covered with news paper as her blanket.  This is a romantic comedy which literally made me laughed in every episode.  The second TV show that made me want to watch again and again just like how I felt for "Friends".  I am also excited to see the second season which started just two weeks ago after three years of unexpected continual.  This fanfic couldn't say to be my favourite one because it's written tragically but a great one to review on.  Would be better if the fanfic story has input some humor to attract me on wanting to read more like how the TV show was.  Although it's pretty refreshing to see the creative imagination into Takano's mind which kinda reminds me of a movie "Being John Malkovich".


6. Toy Story 3 : A story that really touched my heart from the very most.  Who doesn't have toys when you were a kid?  There were favorite ones and not so favorite ones, but you still played every single one of them when you just got them as your new present on your birthdays.  Then, after few years time, you grow up and gradually leaving your toys in boxes instead of playing them.  Until one day you start to clean up your room for things to be thrown away because you're on your way to do your big OE or "grown up" plans.  You found those old toys that has been by your side through childhood which you almost forgot while growing up.  Now, they will be given away because you don't need them anymore.  Every time at the very thought of this, made me want to cry.  I can never throw any of my toys away when I cleaned up my room for spaces.  Thank goodness it has a happy ending.  I'm not quite sure why this fanfic was written in capital letters with italic font and also underlined in the first chapter, it's quite a long fanfic story (in 10 chapters, wonder how long it took to finish it) almost like a rewrite of the movie.  Although I've enjoyed reading the first chapter, but it was almost too much like the movie so kinda bored me out after the first.  Suppose I like a shorter fanfic where you'll have more space for imaginations.

 7. The Karate Kid 2010  In the old karate kid there were dialogs "wipe on, wipe off" with the new karate kid it is, "put the jacket on, take it off, hang it up and pick it up...".  That really cracked me up for sure after noticing the similarities with the old and new.  However, what really caught my attention and became a fan of this movie was when Mr. Han said to Dre, " There are no bad students, only bad teachers...".  Which is quite true because students learn from teachers, students' learnings are the result of teacher's teachings. I've been a Jacky Chen's movie fan since childhood, from a stunts man to an international movie star.  Watching his movies is almost like watching his life journey on big screen.  In Jacky's film, there's alwasy a message inside besides pure action.  Sometimes you'll have to look carefully to find it.  Think that's the big major factor that really attract me to watch his film on and on these years.  For this fanfic site I found, which almost all the fanfic for karate kid is focused on "romance" between Dre and Mei, I find it quite weird reading a romance story on those two characters when knowing they are only 12yrs old!  Would be pretty cool if I can find anyone who will write the next competition training though.

8. Memento is about a person who have lost his long-term memory and can only rely on his short-term memory which only lasts 15mins.  What was fascinating about this film where I can never forget was the way the film was portrayed.  It started off quite confusing because of the often black and color scene switch during the movie and it was also done backwards.  So basically you'll have a good memory to finish the film to understand what was going on.  "Keep it all in mind" fanfic story is very attractive to read on.  The author is quite talented I find, I was able to imagine myself being the character, a lot of fun to play around with your memory sometimes although it can also be quite scary.

 9. Natsume's Book of Friends
(Natsume Yūjin-Chō)  This is the type of fiction story that I love to watch.  It is about a boy inherited his grandmother's ability to see ancient "monsters" where these monsters usually are the creations from Japanese mythology.  But the boy, Natsume, does not have the skill to slay the monsters like his grandmother.  One day, Natsume's parents past away and he is then adopted by his Aunt and Uncle who later gave him his grandmother's book that seems worthless to them.  But this book, Natsume no yujin cho, contained names of the monsters that Natsume's grandma had fought and won and owned their names.  Whoever owns this book gets to control and decide the life and death of the monsters' names in the book.  However, I thought the fanfic sites will be mostly about monsters or even better write about Natsume's grandma on how she fought and gained the names of the monsters, but no, most fanfic are like this fanfic site I found: about a love story between Natsume and Natori ( who is a guy with the same ability a Natsume only stronger in terms of monster slaying skills).  I mean, I do enjoy romances such as "Brokback Mountain" kind, although I really find it hard to adapt to see Natsume and Natori together as a couple...I think Natsume and Neko sensei is a much better match (laugh).


10. Summer Wars Can you imagine our world day by day is closer to the world of cyberspace than our real life?  The film's main characters are based in Japan where the whole world's cities are all managed in cyberspace.  Everyone has an ID and cyber-characters, from train operators to firemen & policemen, from politicians to presidents, all have their own ID and individual authorities.  Then one day, a "hacker" showed up and gained access to break into the high level security in this cyber-city.  The hacker start to mess up systems which directly affect city runnings in real life.  Main character, Kenji, a Mathematics genius who is able to decode within a minute or two, he is also one of the cyber-city's security engineer and accidentally decoded the security code without knowing what it was for to the hacker. The film's storyline was so interesting that I felt I'm looking into the future of today.  This fanfic site is a bit way too long as well but I like the title "We live in Wonderland", which is very true, a wonderland we've created.